Bad Character Intros vs Good Character Intros (Writing Advice)

Writer Brandon McNulty November 10, 2023
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Brandon McNulty gives writing advice that he wishes he'd received as a younger writer.

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Learn what separates a great character introduction from a bad one. Examples from Star Wars, Batman, Guardians of the Galaxy, Die Hard, and more! Patreon Page: https://www.patreon.com/WriterBrandonMcNulty YouTube Membership: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChqAmyhEejCMMIxJmvUrdYw/join Get Brandon's horror/thriller novel BAD PARTS: - AMAZON (USA - Ad Link): https://amzn.to/3esTFYC - AMAZON (UK): https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B088QLMWKW - AMAZON (CAN): https://www.amazon.ca/dp/B088QLMWKW - AMAZON (INDIA): https://www.amazon.in/dp/B088QLMWKW - AMAZON (AUS): https://www.amazon.com.au/dp/B088QLMWKW - BARNES & NOBLE: https://tinyurl.com/BadPartsBN - AUDIBLE: https://www.audible.com/pd/Bad-Parts-Audiobook/B08CXNY2RF - OTHER RETAILERS: https://books2read.com/badparts Get Brandon's supernatural thriller novel ENTRY WOUNDS: - AMAZON (USA - Ad Link): https://amzn.to/2XL737v - AMAZON (UK): https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B097YGX2DH - AMAZON (CAN): https://www.amazon.ca/dp/B097YGX2DH - AMAZON (INDIA): https://www.amazon.in/dp/B097YGX2DH - AMAZON (AUS): https://www.amazon.com.au/dp/B097YGX2DH - BARNES & NOBLE: https://tinyurl.com/EntryWoundsBN - AUDIBLE: https://tinyurl.com/EWAudible - OTHER RETAILERS: https://books2read.com/EntryWounds NOTE: Some of my links are affiliate links, which means that if you click on one of the product links, I’ll receive a small commission. This helps support the channel and allows me to continue to make videos. This does not affect my review of products. All opinions are my own. Thanks for the support! 0:00 Intro 0:35 What Makes a Good Character Intro? 3:00 Bad Intro 1 Significant Nobody 3:40 Bad Example 1 5:25 Good Example 1 6:36 Bad Intro 2 All Tell, No Show 7:53 Bad Example 2 8:47 Good Example 2 11:11 Bad Intro 3 Intro Parade 11:36 Bad Example 3 13:03 Good Example 3 14:59 Bad Intro 4 Blown Opportunity 15:23 Bad Example 4 17:48 Good Example 4 19:17 Outro Follow Brandon McNulty: WEBSITE (Join my mailing list!) - https://brandonmcnulty.com/ TWITTER - https://twitter.com/McNultyFiction FACEBOOK - https://www.facebook.com/McNultyFiction/ SUBSCRIBE to Writer Brandon McNulty here: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChqAmyhEejCMMIxJmvUrdYw?sub_confirmation=1 #WritingAdvice #WritingTips #Writing #author #betterstories #authortube #booktube #authortuber #howtowrite #BrandonMcNulty #WriterBrandonMcNulty #BadParts #WritingCommunity ======================================= CHECK OUT MY OTHER VIDEOS: Mastering Scene Structure: https://youtu.be/012OMrKp85M Writing Scenes that Flow: https://youtu.be/rGqR3Oj61yo 5 Fatal Mistakes that New Writers Make https://youtu.be/_2mYh1-33-Y 5 Time-Saving Tips for Writers (And Readers!) https://youtu.be/z-Hjg70clbw 5 Scientific Inaccuracies in Movies, TV, & Books https://youtu.be/MeaamwDwg9w The BEST Writing Exercise Out There https://youtu.be/nHXprJhiqzs How to Write a Book Pitch https://youtu.be/4paxjmDoXIw Writing Villains #1 - Start with Your Hero https://youtu.be/IVcy-_FkPJI Writing Villains #2 - Goals https://youtu.be/_1lmtZQr8RY Writing Villains #3 - Motivation https://youtu.be/tJH78C3nKvg Writing Villains #4 - When to Introduce Your Villain https://youtu.be/FCzs0tuWICY Writing Villains #5 - Plot Points for Villains https://youtu.be/IKuZjpPVxak Writing Villains #6 - Impacting the Hero https://youtu.be/XmHLiFlfqNY The Anatomy of Story REVIEW: https://youtu.be/IWxdj9rKCu8 Save the Cat Writes a Novel REVIEW: https://youtu.be/w-5x0QFUc4w =======================================

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